Here's the Nashville evaluation of "Confession"
Song Title: "Confession"
Genre: Americana/Folk
Evaluation Method: I would like to hear suggestions on improvements.
The submitter is singing on this submission.
This is not a re-write of a previous submission.
Questions and Comments From the Submitter:
I know the song title should appear in the lyrics of the song, but this one seemed appropriate. Any ideas on alternate titles?
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EVALUATORS OPENING: Hello Richard. Welcome to the evaluation service at NSAI. I am evaluator 7. Thanks for your submission. Please keep in mind that my evaluation is my professional opinion. My intention is to help you to be the best songwriter you can be. Hopefully my comments will help you towards that goal.
FORM/STRUCTURE: You have V/C/V/C/V/C. I suggest you convert the 3rd verse into a bridge section that’s a departure from the rest of the song musically for better dynamics.
TITLE/HOOK: It’s a good hook and in this case I think it works as a title. I suggest you keep the chorus the same lyrically each time around. Pick the best one and use it each time. Perhaps “hell is a scary place” would be the most interesting.
LYRIC: You have some good lines and images here.
It seems to me from this story that your biggest sin, is not keeping the faith. It can’t be stealing bubble gum.
It seems to me that you are not really letting the listener know how you really sinned. Perhaps I’m missing something but the more drama the better. Those are my thoughts.
OVERALL THEME/IDEA: It’s a good theme. With some tweaking, this can work for the Folk/Americana market.
MELODY/METER (IF APPLICABLE): The verses sound like a cool spiritual folk melody, the choruses can be more interesting and more up lifting musically so you would have better dynamics. A good solid bridge would help as well.
CLOSING COMMENTS: This has potential. Keep up the good work.
Genre: Americana/Folk
Evaluation Method: I would like to hear suggestions on improvements.
The submitter is singing on this submission.
This is not a re-write of a previous submission.
Questions and Comments From the Submitter:
I know the song title should appear in the lyrics of the song, but this one seemed appropriate. Any ideas on alternate titles?
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EVALUATORS OPENING: Hello Richard. Welcome to the evaluation service at NSAI. I am evaluator 7. Thanks for your submission. Please keep in mind that my evaluation is my professional opinion. My intention is to help you to be the best songwriter you can be. Hopefully my comments will help you towards that goal.
FORM/STRUCTURE: You have V/C/V/C/V/C. I suggest you convert the 3rd verse into a bridge section that’s a departure from the rest of the song musically for better dynamics.
TITLE/HOOK: It’s a good hook and in this case I think it works as a title. I suggest you keep the chorus the same lyrically each time around. Pick the best one and use it each time. Perhaps “hell is a scary place” would be the most interesting.
LYRIC: You have some good lines and images here.
It seems to me from this story that your biggest sin, is not keeping the faith. It can’t be stealing bubble gum.
It seems to me that you are not really letting the listener know how you really sinned. Perhaps I’m missing something but the more drama the better. Those are my thoughts.
OVERALL THEME/IDEA: It’s a good theme. With some tweaking, this can work for the Folk/Americana market.
MELODY/METER (IF APPLICABLE): The verses sound like a cool spiritual folk melody, the choruses can be more interesting and more up lifting musically so you would have better dynamics. A good solid bridge would help as well.
CLOSING COMMENTS: This has potential. Keep up the good work.
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Here's the Nashville evaluation of "Blue looks good on you"
Song Evaluation Date Submitted: 2013-05-14 7:53 am
Date Completed: 2013-05-29 11:46 am
Song Title: "Blue looks good on you"
Genre: Americana/Folk
Evaluation Method: I would like to hear suggestions on improvements.
The submitter is singing on this submission.
This is not a re-write of a previous submission.
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EVALUATORS OPENING: Hey Richard, I’m Evaluator #11 and thank you very much for using NSAI’s online evaluation service. I know you’re excited to get down to the song evaluation and, as we go through it, please remember that my suggestions are purely my opinion based on my own personal experience. I will be focusing on the areas that need attention and give you the absolute best advice and critique that I possibly can. So let’s get started!
FORM/STRUCTURE: The arrangement looks good - the Verses and Choruses trade off fine and the total length is perfect.
TITLE/HOOK: Love the hook...great spin on the "blue" meaning. It's clear and supported by the lyric pretty well and you give it an awesome melody moment when "blue" is sung. Good stuff.
LYRIC: The lyric is very strong overall but there were just a few things that are really sticking out as awkward. The first is the word "boohoo"...it's quirky but it really just does not sound like what this singer would say after hearing the language and style of the rest of the lyric. I'd definitely look for a replacement of that word. "Cunning schemes" was a little awkward as well but not as much as boohoo. Other than those phrases, everything else feels pretty good.
OVERALL THEME/IDEA: The idea is cool - no suggestions here.
MELODY/METER (IF APPLICABLE): The melody works really well for the attitude of the song as well as matching the lyric. The lift with the word "blue" is awesome and gives a huge hook at that spot. The phrasing is comfortable and the meter is consistent...no suggestions here at all.
CLOSING COMMENTS: This is a really strong song overall but I'd just look at those couple of lyrics to really get it stronger - they're pretty awkward and might be counterproductive to the heart of the song. I hope these suggestions help you with this song as well as your others, Richard. Thank you again for using the evaluation service!
Date Completed: 2013-05-29 11:46 am
Song Title: "Blue looks good on you"
Genre: Americana/Folk
Evaluation Method: I would like to hear suggestions on improvements.
The submitter is singing on this submission.
This is not a re-write of a previous submission.
View Lyrics / Listen to Song
EVALUATORS OPENING: Hey Richard, I’m Evaluator #11 and thank you very much for using NSAI’s online evaluation service. I know you’re excited to get down to the song evaluation and, as we go through it, please remember that my suggestions are purely my opinion based on my own personal experience. I will be focusing on the areas that need attention and give you the absolute best advice and critique that I possibly can. So let’s get started!
FORM/STRUCTURE: The arrangement looks good - the Verses and Choruses trade off fine and the total length is perfect.
TITLE/HOOK: Love the hook...great spin on the "blue" meaning. It's clear and supported by the lyric pretty well and you give it an awesome melody moment when "blue" is sung. Good stuff.
LYRIC: The lyric is very strong overall but there were just a few things that are really sticking out as awkward. The first is the word "boohoo"...it's quirky but it really just does not sound like what this singer would say after hearing the language and style of the rest of the lyric. I'd definitely look for a replacement of that word. "Cunning schemes" was a little awkward as well but not as much as boohoo. Other than those phrases, everything else feels pretty good.
OVERALL THEME/IDEA: The idea is cool - no suggestions here.
MELODY/METER (IF APPLICABLE): The melody works really well for the attitude of the song as well as matching the lyric. The lift with the word "blue" is awesome and gives a huge hook at that spot. The phrasing is comfortable and the meter is consistent...no suggestions here at all.
CLOSING COMMENTS: This is a really strong song overall but I'd just look at those couple of lyrics to really get it stronger - they're pretty awkward and might be counterproductive to the heart of the song. I hope these suggestions help you with this song as well as your others, Richard. Thank you again for using the evaluation service!